从句使用量太少;文中用词稍显贫乏,在词汇拼写也要再接再厉;结构不严谨,行文不流畅。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning.After that, he rode his bike to the park.He had great fun playing in the park.At noon, he have lunch at McDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, sam played basketball from 4 to 6 with his classmates.After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father.His father bought a classic CD for him.He was very happy beacuse he enjoys muisc very much. What a happy day Sam had!