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At present,when economy has improved,more and more people own their cars.Some persons said,that there is no doubt that it is a good way to make people life convenience and comfort.Also,these people thoughts are it can improve other industry.Every coin has two sides,the other people think the more cars are,the more transportation problem we have.What's more,there are more and more parking problem appear,because of more and more car.