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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday.Then he rided bike to the park and he was so happy at there.He had a lunch with his mother in McDonald's.At this afternoon,he began to play basketball with his classmates at 4:00pm and it's over till 6:00pm.After dinner,Sam and father went for a walk,his father buy on classical music CD for him.What a funny day for Sam.