如若增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;词汇表达较灵活准确,高级词汇使用过少,另外注意文中个别的拼写错误;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
Hello,my name is Lucy King.Please let me introduce myself to you. I'm from the UK and I'm 13 years old now.My main languge is English. Usually,I like sports,music and movies.The purpose to write this letter is that I want to make pen pal in China becasue I love China and wants to know more details about China. First of all,I wish the pen pal is a girl and she has the same hobbies with me Secondly,I wish she can teach me Chinese. Above is my wish,I'm looking forward to getting the information from you.