作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,高级词汇使用稍显不足;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
Hello,my name is Lucy King. Please let me introduce myself to you. I'm from the UK and I'm 13 years old now. My first languge is English. After work, I like sports, music and movies. Regarding the purpose to write this letter is that I want to make pen pal in China because I like China and want to know more details about China. About the pen pal, I have some requirements as below: First of all,I wish the pen pal must be a girl and she has the same hobbies with me Secondly,I wish she can teach me Chinese. I'm looking forward to getting the information from you.