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Yesterday, Sam got up at 6. Then he rode a bike to the park. He had a good time in the park. It was time for lunch. So he with his parents had lunch at McDonald's. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball in school with his classmates. They played at 4 in the afternoon till 6. After supper, Sam's father and Sam went for a walk together. And his father bought Sam an ancient music CD. How interesting Sam had this day!