正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
Sam got up at six o’clock yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike to the park. In the park, He had great fun. At noon, he had lunch with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball from four to six with his classmates. It was happy. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father buy a CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. What a happy day!