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My favorite sport it is very important for us to have a hobby in our life. football is my favorite sport, which not only improves my health but also is helpful for me to make friends. At first, i didnt like it much and thought table tennis is more funny. one day, on the way to home, i found a football on th road. I picked it up and played it with my friends, since that time i reallize that football is also very interesting and love it more and more. taking football training, football game and watch beame one part of my life.