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What a good day it is! I got up at six o'clock yesterday. Than I rode bicycle to go to the park. I as well as my parents had lunch at noon. In the afernoon both I and my classmates played basketball from four pm till six pm. After dinner, My father along with me went for a walk. My father gave me buy a classical music CD. what a amazing dat it is !