作者词汇表达较为熟练,高级词汇使用不是很多;如若增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。
What a good day it is! I got up when it was six o'clock yesterday. Than I rode bicycle to go to the park. when the time arrived 12 o'clock, I as well as my parents had lunch at McDonald's. In the afternoon both I and my classmates played basketball from four pm till six pm. After dinner, my father along with me went for a walk. At that time, I saw a CD about classical music, my father bought it to me. what an amazing dat it is !