增加一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;作者词汇基础较薄弱,要注意积累高级词汇,单词拼写要认真;文章结构欠严谨,基本没有衔接成分。
Sam got up at six oclock yesterday. He gone to park by the cycle,then he played very happy at the park.At the afteroon,his parents with he eated the lunch in the McDonald`s. Then,Sam were played basketball with his master among at four o`clock till to six o`clock.Befor dinner , Sam gone to walk with his father , his father buy one Genteel music CD for Sam. Sam feel very funy at the day.