作者词汇量偏小,另外文章有些单词拼写错误;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;语言不流畅。
sam got up at six o'clock. then he went to park by bicycle, he had a good time in the park. he had a dinner with his parence at mcdonald's. in the afternoon sam and his classmates played basketball in school from 4 to 6 PM. after evening dinner, sam and his father went for a walk, and his father bought him a classes CD. what a good for sam.