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Hello,my name is Lucy King.I am thirteen years old.I come from the UK where we speak in English.I have many hobbies ,such as sports ,music.I often go to see movies with my friends in my free time.I know China that beautiful comtry is in a movie also.I love China very much and I want to know more about China. I want to learn Chinese from you.Would you like to make a friend with me?we can do many things together.