文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;结构不严谨,行文不流畅。
Sam is yesterday is very amusing! yesterday morning, he gut up at 6 o'clock. Then buy bike go nature park, he can play at park, so he very happy! at noon, he with parent eat lunch in McDonald's. In Afternoon, he with hes classmate play basketball at school, from afternoon 4 o'clock till afternoon 6 o'clock. After dinner, Sam with father go tor a walk, and father for he buy classical music CD. That day Sam live amusing very mach!