2.短文的开头已给出,不计入总词数。 词数100左右
应增加文中从句的使用;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错;作者词汇多样性不足,但能较灵活地使用部分高级词汇,但单词拼写的检查要加强。
There are 50persent students thought that have too many workes, which made them have a lot of presures.that another 30persent convinced their parents are have a high requiret,and have a few communication between them.And also have 20%students think of the school's activity too less which made them had a poor physicals. In my onion,the school should reduce the workes ,and the parents should take care their kids more,the school life should add more activities in order to improve the children's health.