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My favorite flim “Pursuit of Happyness” is my favorite movie. I have watched it more than 3 times. The low-cost film got high box office. The actor is Will Smith and his son. The film tells the actor went through unemployment,divorce and homeless. After that, he get new job. He try his best to become top sales. This flim taught me to do anything never quit and never give up.