文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但高级词汇表达还需要很大提升;文中应增加从句和复合句的使用;文章层次清晰分明,但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词。
At the last week-end, I went to the zoo in Beijing. There were many people at the monkey area , giving monkey foods , playing with tiger, having fun with them. The animals are very kind to people, I think we should be kind to them ether. First we should keep clean , not throw garbage everywhere. Protecting the environment of the animal s is very important. Because , protecting animal is equal to protect our own.