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This advice very useful for many persons who want to leave something behind, prevent the great wall from graffiti. When I saw this article, I think it is unnecessary for us to spend some money to leave something, at first, waste our money at all, at second, we demand to protect the Great wall from damage, why do you want to leave your mark, it is unuseless and unworthy for you to do that, we have to know it is harmful for it, the relevant department will give a good advice to protect it, but not to built the fake wall to satisfy their desire leaving something behind. Because they will charge for extra 120 USD if they want to leave mark, they will not be willing to pay for it actively and leave mark free if they don't see.