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My favorite sport Playing the footbal is my favorite sport in my spare time, I remembered that I loved to play the football by chance, when I went back to home and found that there was a football on the road, so I picked it up and took it to home with me, then we always played it with my good friends after classes every day, so I am deeply loving to play the football from then on. We offen take part in football match in our school, in order to improve our playing skills, we have to practice frequently on Sundays, as a matter of fact, we usually watch football match via TV, my favorite football star is beckham in United Kingdom, of course, I wish I could become a football athlete, meanwhile I have a biggest dream to become a professional football athlete in the world cup.