文章词汇表达要更加熟练,希望能更多使用一些高级词汇;应增加文中从句的使用;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错。
yesterday,Sam get up in six o'clock,then he ride bike to park,and he play very happy in park.noon he has lunch with his parents in Mcdonald's.afternoon,Sam and his schoolmate playing basketball in school,they are four from four o'clock to six o'clock with playing basketball,after dinner,Sam go for a walk with his father, his father bought a classical music CD,the day Sam is so funny.