从句使用量不足;文中词汇表达比较丰富,但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam got up at six o'clock,yesterday morning.After that,he rode a bike to park, he had great fun playing in the park.At noon,he had lunch in McDonald’s with his parents,In the afternoon,he played basketball from four to six with his classmates,it was relaxing.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father,his faterh bought a classical CD for him.he was very happy because he likes music very much.What a haapy day Sam had!