文章词汇使用丰富度还要提高,高级词汇的积累上也要再接再厉;从句使用量不足;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam got up at six o'clock,yesterday morning.After that,he rode a bike to park, he had great fun playing in the park.At noon,he had lunch in McDonald’s with his parents,In the afternoon,he played basketball from four to six with his classmates,it was relaxing.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father,his faterh bought a classical CD for him.he was very happy because he enjoys music very much.What a happy day Sam had!