从句使用量不足,应增加从句和复合句的使用;请作者增加词汇丰富度;层次不够清晰,文中很少使用衔接词。
Tom has many rules,he get up at six o'clock at everyday mornig,he must to go to school at 6:15,and he can't eat outside.he can't listen to music on the school days,and he can't watch TV on school night.he must be back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.