文章词汇使用丰富度还要提高,高级词汇的积累上也要再接再厉;从句使用量不足;文中很少出现过渡词和衔接词。
Sam got up at six o'lock,yesterday morning.after that,he rode his bike go to the park,he had great fun playing in the park.At noon,he had lunch with his parents in the McDonald’s.In the afternoon,Sam from four to six played basketball with his classmates,it was relaxing.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father,Sam's father bought a classical CD for him, he was very happy becaus he enjoys music very much.what a fun day Sam had!