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Sam get up at six,clock yesterday morning, then he went to park read bicycle, he has a good time. He with his mather and father ate lunch in McDonald yesterday noon. Sam and his friend played ball in his school. Sam with his father went for a walk when them have had dinner, and his father bought a CD for him. Today is so fun to Sam!