文中从句偏少,句子错误有点多了;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;文中拼写错误稍多,词汇表达贫乏。
san got up at six oclock yesterday.then she rode the bickle to the garden.she with her parents had Lunch at the McDonald at afternoon she was playing basketball with herclassroom at the shool from 4 oclock till6 oclock after the dinner Samwith herfather go for a walk her father bau a cla muisc cdfor her ,Sam had a intererted day!