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Our Montor Our monitor is very great.He is a good boy.His name is Li Ming.He is ten years old.He has a big eye and a big nose.He is so beautiful. He often wear a red clothes and a red sweater,because he is like red.He likes to read, and often read in the library. That is our monitor and our like him.