文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但高级词汇表达还需要很大提升;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
Our Montor I am a student in NO6 Middle School. I'm in Class 12, Grade 8. Our monitor is very great. He is a good boy. His name is. He is ten years old. He has a big eye and a big nose. He is so beautiful. Li Ming is tall and strong. His hair is black and short. He often wore a simple vest and a cylindrical, tasseled hat, because he is like red. He likes to read, and often read in the library. This is our monitor and we like he.