作者应增加文中长句和从句和使用;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;文章结构欠严谨,基本没有衔接成分。
Sam got up at six yesterday morning. Then he went to the park by bike and had a very good time in the park. He had lunch with his parents at McDonald's. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates at school from 4 until 6. After supper, he went for a walk with his father, who bought his son a CD of classical music. What an interesting day!