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It's very important for us to play sports in the society and my favorite sport is playing football.An accident chance makes me like football.One day,I picked up a football on my way home.When I had it,I always played football with friends.So I fell in love with football.I took part in a football club. I usually practiced playing football and had a football game with my classmates.I have a dream that i want to be a professional football player just like my favorite football star.