从句使用偏少;文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写还要加强;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Yestoday, In the morning, Sam got up at six clock and then went to park by bike, he was very happy when he was stay park. In the noon, his parents and he had a lunch at the McDonald's.(In the noon, he had a lunch with his parents.) In the afternoon,he palyed basketball with his classmates from 4pm to 6pm.After dinner, sam went for a walk with his father,and his father buy a CD to him in the