小学一年级英语作文:My dog

正确句子比例很高，但需多多加强从句的使用；文中词汇表达较丰富恰当，但高级词汇稍显不足；层次不够清晰，文中很少使用衔接词。

I had a dog in long ago. My daughter calls it "maxim". It has a pretty brown hair. It was at my home in young old age. I often play with it. But we had no time to take care of it. So, we send it to my sister's home. It grows up day by day. It was into a large dog. One day, it went to other's place. We looked for it everywhere. Finally, it left us forever. Some time, I will miss it.