文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;文中从句过少;结构不严谨,行文不流畅。
Sam got up 6 o'clock last day. Then he went to the park by bike, he played very happy at the park. At noon,he had lunch in the McDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, he played basketball from 4 p.m till 6 p.m with his classmates at school. After dinner, he went for a walk with his father. His father bought him a classic CD music.How interesting the day is Sam.