增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累高级词汇;全文结构不够严谨,文中很少使用衔接词和过渡词。
I have a best who is called Tom. He is interesting and serious. He has rules by himself everyday. He gets up at 6:00 and goes to school at 6:15 on morning on school days. He has a good hobby that he eat each meal at his home. Tom has 3 "Do not" in his life. Don't eat outside. Don't listen to music on school days. Don't watch TV on school nights. He is always back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening. Above waht belongs to Tom's rules.