文章词汇表达要更加熟练,希望能更多使用一些高级词汇;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;建议加强过渡词和衔接词的积累,文章结构不严谨。
One possible version: Pen pal wanted Hello,my name is Lucy King. I am 13 years old,I come from the UK. I like sports on weekend. And I like listening to music and watching movies. I Just come back from china,I find I like china.I would like to know more about China. Hope I can learn Chinese with you