拼写做的很棒,高级词汇可适量增加;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;层次不够清晰,文中很少使用衔接词。
An interesting day Hello everyone,my name is Sam.today i want writing about me interesting day in yesterday. I get up at six yesterday.Then go to the park by bike, i'm very happy in park.Noon and parents eat lunch at mcdonald's.This afternoon my classmates and I play basketball in school.Has been hit till six o 'clock in the afternoon at four o 'clock in the afternoon.After dinner,with my father go for a walk,My father give me buy a Classical music CD.Finally,we are Go home together.What a funny day!