希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;过渡词和衔接词不饱和,文章行文较为流畅;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用。
A trip We went to Gulangyu land in summer last year. There was many things can't to forgot it Last trip . For example, we went there with our workmate by plane. We were from Shanghai to Xiamen airport. But during we came back by our plane was late. Because the weather was bad . It was thunderbolt and rainy. So we waited for the plane to leave spend many hours.