作者词汇量偏小,另外文章有些单词拼写错误;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;语言不流畅。
My daughter havs a pet. It is a lovely mouse. It lives in a small cage. It has a white hair. It likes eating foods and playing with himself. We need to clear the cage every week. Sometime my daughter forgets to offer food for mouse. So it was hungry. Then it will jump and jump.