增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文章词汇表达灵活恰当,也能较熟练地使用一定的高级词汇;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
When I grow up My name is Clever. I work in a big company. I am a product manager. Some kids's toy design by me. These product are include stroller and car seat and cot. The product sale to many countries. I fell happy to see that child uses the stroller. Many childs's mother likes to select the fashion and better stroller . So we need to visit the supermarket and gather the information. The work is hard. But we are happy.