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When I grow up My name is Clever. I work in a big company. I am a product manager. Some kids's toy is my design me. These products contain stroller and car seat and cot. The product sale to many countries. I feel happy to see that child uses the stroller. A lot of babies's mothers like choose the fashion and better stroller . So we need to visit the supermarket and gather the information. The work is hard. But we are happy.