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Sam got up at six o’clock yesterday.After that, he rode his bide to the park.he had great fun play in the park.At noon,he had lunch McDonald’s with his parent.In the affernoon, Sam played football from four to six with his classmaters.Afrer dinner,Sam went for a wall with his father。His father bought a calssical Cd with him.