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My grandfather's name is Mr.zhang. He is a farmer. He is eighty years old. I can't to remember anything about him. Becase my mother have no telled me something. He was very kindly and hard-working.But he was ill. Then he was died as lessloon. I feeled very sad. My mother feeled very sad too. Finally i often miss him about kindly face.