从句偏少,建议平时练习中加强从句的练习;用词灵活多样,但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
How To Protect Our Eyes As we all know,our eyes are quite important to us.For example,we use eyes to see,to read.Imagine what will happen if we can't see! Perhaps our life will be more difficuit!So we must know how to keep us see clearly.Firstly,we should watch the green things per hour.It helps our eyes to rest.Secondly,don't use too much computers or mobile phones!This is the most helpful step.The people that don't always use computers can usually see more clearly than people that always looks at the computer screens!That's a fact.Finally,we can also eat more healthy vegetables and fruits,such as carrots,tomatoes and cherries.If you are following these steps,I am sure you will see more clearly!