3.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累高级词汇;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
A bout new year in china we will get a new year soon after. Many peoples busy in the trip. They are go home by bus or by train or by plane or driver himself. because the relatives need us to attend . We often go home once year. They have many things to talk each other. some interesting things and some laughing storys. However many suns and daughters go home happy. The holiday is a week.