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Sam's daily life Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning.Then he went to the park by bike.He played of very happy in the park.At noon,he had lunch in the McDonald's with his parents.At afternoon,he played basketball from four o'clock to six o'clock with his classmates.After dinner,he went for a walk with his father.His father bought a classical music's CD for him.What a fun day Sam had!