文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
One possible version: Pen pal wanted My name is Lucy King.I am a 13 years old girl.I come from the US and I can speak English.I want a pen pal in China.I always sports every day.I like popular music and I sometimes go to movies with my friends.What about you?I hope you can write letter by return.