单词拼写做得很好,请注意积累词汇量;文中从句数量不足,可增加从句和复合句的使用;文中基本没有过渡词和衔接词,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
Lucy is the cute girl .She come from the UK .Lucy find the pen pal in the China because she deep love China,To more understanding China.she will hope find the China girl,she'd better have the same hobby with me,she will hope study chinese speak.Lucy hobbies is sports, music and movies.She language is English So she want find the China pen pal .