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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning,than went to the park by bick.He had a good time in the park.in the afternoon,he had lunch at McDonald's with him parents.Later the afternoon,he played baketball in the school with his classmates from four o'clock to six o'clock.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father,his father bought a muice CDfor him.iSam had a interesting time in this day.