文中从句数量过少;希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;结构不严谨,行文不流畅。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning, than went to the park by Bick. He had a ball in the park. In the afternoon, he had lunch at McDonald's with his parents. Later the afternoon, he played basketball in the school with his pupil from four p.m.to six p.m.. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father and his father bought a music CD for him. Sam had a interesting time on this day.