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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning, than went to the park by Bick. He had a ball in the park. In the afternoon, he had lunch at McDonald's with his parents. Later the afternoon, he played basketball in the school with his pupils from four p.m.to six p.m.. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father and his father bought a music CD for him. Sam had an interesting time on this day.